Pet Surprise

WALT make up a story about a Pet Day problem.

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• Begin with an orientation to tell the reader who, did what, where and when.

“Pet Day will be on Friday,” Miss Anderson, Tom’s teacher, announced to the class on Monday. “Bring your pet to school and tell us about it, then we will have a pet parade.”

Tom was so excited. He would be able to bring Harry to school to 

show everyone.

• Write the events leading up to the problem.

At the end of the day, he ran all the way home to get his pet ready for Friday.

He loved Harry and had wanted to show his friends for a long time, but his mum and dad had told him that Harry must never leave the house; but, now, his

teacher had given him permission to bring it to school.

Smilingly, he polished Harry’s green silky skin, talking to it with his friendly voice. “You’re allowed to come to school, Harry. You can meet my friends and my friends can meet you.”

As soon as Friday came around, Harry carefully took Harry out of its cage and placed him into his black backpack. He couldn’t wait to get to school, so he ran

all the way.

When the bell rang, he and the rest of the class stepped into the 

classroom.

• Write the problem.

Tom opened his backpack to show his friends what he had brought to school for Pet Day.

“It’s a green, slippery, slimey …...................” he said slowly. “Snake!” he 

shouted.

“Tom Denver, give me that thing right now!” Miss Anderson 

commanded.

Tom opened his hand to pass it over, but, at that moment, naughty Billy Burton lunged to grab it himself. He bumped Tom’s shoulder and Tom hurtled forward, the snake flying out of his hand to the back of the classroom.

“Eeeeeee! Where is it?” squealed Miss Anderson.

Chaos threatened in Room 4.  Children jumped up and ran around, screeching

their lungs out and pushing over chairs and desks, trying to find Tom’s snake.

• Write the events to tell your readers how the problem was solved.

Pet Surprise

Everyone was jumping on the desks and screaming was going (could be heard) all over the class room.

Tom, at once, said, "Shhhhh!"

Everyone stopped at once.

He had an idea. He said, "I need paper, glue, wire and cords to attach. He put it together to get the snake to go in. He put the teacher’s ham sandwich in the cage.

The snake slithered into the cage.  

Flynn 23/5/16

Well done, Flynn.

-         Use put, not putted.

-         Every time a sentence is about a different person, begin a new paragraph.