Pet Surprise

WALT make up a story about a Pet Day problem.

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• Begin with an orientation to tell the reader who, did what, where and when.

“Pet Day will be on Friday,” Miss Anderson, Tom’s teacher, announced to the class on Monday. “Bring your pet to school and tell us about it, then we will have a pet parade.”

Tom was so excited. He would be able to bring Harry to school to 

show everyone.

• Write the events leading up to the problem.

At the end of the day, he ran all the way home to get his pet ready for Friday.

He loved Harry and had wanted to show his friends for a long time, but his mum and dad had told him that Harry must never leave the house; but, now, his

teacher had given him permission to bring it to school.

Smilingly, he polished Harry’s green silky skin, talking to it with his friendly voice. “You’re allowed to come to school, Harry. You can meet my friends and my friends can meet you.”

As soon as Friday came around, Harry carefully took Harry out of its cage and placed him into his black backpack. He couldn’t wait to get to school, so he ran

all the way.

When the bell rang, he and the rest of the class stepped into the 

classroom.

• Write the problem.

Tom opened his backpack to show his friends what he had brought to school for Pet Day.

“It’s a green, slippery, slimey …...................” he said slowly. “Snake!” he 

shouted.

“Tom Denver, give me that thing right now!” Miss Anderson 

commanded.

Tom opened his hand to pass it over, but, at that moment, naughty Billy Burton lunged to grab it himself. He bumped Tom’s shoulder and Tom hurtled forward, the snake flying out of his hand to the back of the classroom.

“Eeeeeee! Where is it?” squealed Miss Anderson.

Chaos threatened in Room 4.  Children jumped up and ran around, screeching

their lungs out and pushing over chairs and desks, trying to find Tom’s snake.

• Write the events to tell your readers how the problem was solved.

Pet Surprise

Everyone was jumping on the desks and screaming was going (could be heard) all over the class room.

Tom, at once, said, "Shhhhh!"

Everyone stopped at once.

He had an idea. He said, "I need paper, glue, wire and cords to attach. He put it together to get the snake to go in. He put the teacher’s ham sandwich in the cage.

The snake slithered into the cage.  

Flynn 23/5/16

Well done, Flynn.

-         Use put, not putted.

-         Every time a sentence is about a different person, begin a new paragraph. 

From Jamling Tenzing

Jamling Tenzing

May 14 at 1:56pm · Namche Bazar, Nepal

To all the children of St. Paul's primary school, greetings from the Himalayas.

I know you have been following John and our journey to the to roof of the world. I hope you learned something about our mountains and culture.

I invite you all to join me one day to visit our part of the world.

Hi my name is Flynn and thank you for the lovely photos and story's about going to Mount Everest base camp. I have learned lots about your culture and thank you for the invite I might come to Nepal one day.

Jamling Tenzing Hi Flynn, it is our pleasure to share a part of our history and culture. I hope you will be able to experience it first hand when you visit in the years to come.

Mount Everest

Jonathan / Magic

You need an orientation. Who is Jonathon? You said he came - the readers want to know, came where? Who is everyone? What was fun. Jonathon came. It was fun. Everyone came in happily. Jonathon opened his wallet. Fire busted out. He closed then opened it. He gave it to a little boy and said, “Check if it is a real $5.”  

The boy said, “Yes," Johnathon folded the $5 and unfolded it again. It had turned into a $10 note. Everyone was shocked like a statue. 

My favourite was the one when colours came out of his mouth. It was funny. He made balloon animals. They always POPPED! 

Jonathon told Ashton to come up. He had nothing in his hand. He pulled out something from Ashton's shirt sleeve. It was colourful and it was long. 

He had a book. He told the teachers, "Do you like Coca-Cola?" 

Whaea Mihi said, "I do." 

She went to Johnathon.  He had a book. He held up a picture of a coke then put it in the book and closed it and opened it again. It turned into a real Coca-Cola in the book. He poured it in a plastic cup. He said to Whaea Mihi, "Do what I do." 

He drank from it and so did Whaea Mihi. Then he spat it out into the cup again. Whaea Mihi didn't copy that action.

Mount Everest

The Birthday Of The Church

The Church is the people who spread the Good News about Jesus.

The followers of Jesus were hiding in a room. They were scared until they saw flames on their heads.

They weren't scared anymore. They went out to spread the Good News. This was called Pentecost. 
It was the birth of the Church.

MUM AND ME

Mum parked her black car at the Warehouse.
We went in to find a TV. We searched but there was no TV so we got back in the car and drove quickly to another Warehouse. 
Next, we had lunch with my Dad. 
After that, we drove to another Warehouse. Mum asked one of the people who worked there, "Do you have a TV that we can buy?" 
They said, "Sorry, we don't." 
Mum and I went back to the car. We drove to the last Warehouse. We went into Harvey Norman's. The Warehouse was just upstairs. We looked at the TVs. There were small TVs and big TVs, but they were so much money. We went up the escalator. 
Mum asked the people who worked there, "Do you have a TV we can buy?"    
They said, "Sorry, we don't." 
Mum said, "I rang and someone picked up and said we could have a display model." 
They said, "That lady is at the hospital. Someone broke his leg." 
The lady who Mum rang came in when we didn't notice. She said, "Let's get you a TV."
We went to the display. She unplugged it and brought it to the counter. Mum paid for it and carried it to the car then we got back in the car and drove.
I said "You're the best Mum in the world."